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Wednesday, December 20, 2006

An embarrassing experience - Draft one
I had an embarrasing experience when I was 14. One day, on my way to the cram school, I saw a man and a baby. They are similar to my teacher and his
child, so I called them very loudly on the street. But after they turned to me, I
found he was not my teacher. After that, I rode the bicycle very fast. It was really embarrassing, because there were also some people walking on that street. Now I don't call people loudly on the road, unless I am very sure who he
is. I don't want to make the same mistake again.

8 Comments:

Blogger Sally Sun said...

I am very sure who they are 吧
前面是people

5:11 AM  
Blogger Debie said...

It should be"There were similar to...".

4:10 AM  
Blogger Estella said...

But after* they turned to me, I
found he was not my teacher. After that*, I rode the bicycle very fast.

some suggestions:
*1 after 改成 when 我覺得好一點
*2 改成 the incident 呃 感覺比較高級
= =+ 又可以充字數 哈哈哈

6:54 AM  
Blogger 薪雯 said...

我的意見跟前幾個差不多耶!!被講光了

7:47 PM  
Blogger Unknown said...

太晚來了
沒什麼可改

8:01 PM  
Blogger Penny said...

very funny..
my opinion is similar to them..

12:07 AM  
Blogger 邱暐心 said...

I had an embarrasing experience when I was 14.
上句的"embarrassing"拼錯了。

大概就這樣了吧。

4:22 AM  
Blogger 林小雞 said...

It seems no problem.

5:51 PM  

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