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Monday, February 26, 2007

Tips of staying healthy.-Draft one

Staying healthy is really an important thing for our life. There are some tips of staying healthy. First of all, do exercise regularly. To do that, you will have a strong body, and the resistance will become higher. Second, to have enough sleep, and thus you will feel very energetic when you do everything. Finally, stay in a good mood. It is also the most important one. Because good mood can make you feel happy, you always feel that, some diseases will keep away from you. All in all, if you are not health, you can’t do anything well.

8 Comments:

Blogger Debie said...

Yes, I agree with you.

11:18 PM  
Blogger Sally Sun said...

Second, to have enough sleep, and thus you will feel very.....

我覺得to have enough..應用祈使句 have enough因為此句無動詞

還有thus前and可以不用寫吧

It is also the most important one. Because good mood can ......

because 需用小寫,因為原因在前ㄧ句

you always feel that, some ...
這句應該可以斷到下ㄧ句去了

3:21 AM  
Blogger Estella said...

I can't find any other mistake.

7:20 PM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

to have enough sleep->to 不用加唄!!
and thus ->不用加thus
you always feel that應該可以省略唄!!

7:20 PM  
Blogger Penny said...

very good!

7:26 PM  
Blogger Unknown said...

Good!!

7:35 PM  
Blogger 邱秀珍 said...

great ^^

7:50 PM  
Blogger 薪雯 said...

do exercise regularly. do exercise 做練習題的意思而不是做運動,應該用 take exercise或exercise直接當動詞

If you are not health,......應該用healthy

7:59 PM  

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