Tips of staying healthy.-Draft one
Staying healthy is really an important thing for our life. There are some tips of staying healthy. First of all, do exercise regularly. To do that, you will have a strong body, and the resistance will become higher. Second, to have enough sleep, and thus you will feel very energetic when you do everything. Finally, stay in a good mood. It is also the most important one. Because good mood can make you feel happy, you always feel that, some diseases will keep away from you. All in all, if you are not health, you can’t do anything well.

8 Comments:
Yes, I agree with you.
Second, to have enough sleep, and thus you will feel very.....
我覺得to have enough..應用祈使句 have enough因為此句無動詞
還有thus前and可以不用寫吧
It is also the most important one. Because good mood can ......
because 需用小寫,因為原因在前ㄧ句
you always feel that, some ...
這句應該可以斷到下ㄧ句去了
I can't find any other mistake.
to have enough sleep->to 不用加唄!!
and thus ->不用加thus
you always feel that應該可以省略唄!!
very good!
Good!!
great ^^
do exercise regularly. do exercise 做練習題的意思而不是做運動,應該用 take exercise或exercise直接當動詞
If you are not health,......應該用healthy
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