Translation-Draft One
TV Program
Choosing the programs carefully is very important. Though the television is the most important channel which provides the information and the entertainment, it may have some disadvantages. Some programs that fill with violence and lust have bad influence for teenagers. Spending too much time watching TV may also hurt our eyesight. Therefore, we should choose the programs which are helpful to our bodies and mind. The most important thing is not to be a couch potato.
The Computers
The computers play an important role in our daily life; they can help students hand in homework quickly, and they also help people deliver the information in time, as long as you turn on the computers, you surely fall in love with them. However, you are sure to remind yourself, not to sit in front of the computers for a long time; most parents do not like children depend on computers, especially the discussion of the Bulletin Board System is very wasting time.
posted by Vivian @ 8:32 PM
8 Comments:
"Though the television is the most important channel which provides the information and the entertainment,"should not plus "the" before "television"
There is a wrong sentence-especially the discussion of the Bulletin Board System is very wasting time.
Check out again!
第一篇
important盡量避免重複這樣會減少可看性
第二篇
like+ving or to v
especially是adv前有分號
以上 就醬咩...
is very wasting time
怪怪的
have bad influence for teenagers. for應該用on.
you are sure to remind yourself
should be "be sure to remind youself"
第一段be filled with
第二段very wasting time
改"wasting much time"
The computers ... 前面應該不用加The吧
"The computers play an important ... computers, you surely fall in love with them."
這一句好長喔 斷個句吧
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