Helping People-Draft One
I live in Taipei and work as a volunteer in a hospital. It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people. Yesterday morning, an old woman who walked very slowly and not very well was in the hospital hall, there are a lot of people around her. Subsequently, she got injured by a fall. I went to support her with my hand at once, at that time, she wore a smile with appreciation and said “thank you” to me. Suddenly, I felt very warm and my heart was filled with the sense of satisfied. It was really unforgettable. Afterwards, I accompanied her to see the doctor, and also talk with her for a short while; both we were very happy. I have got a good experience; I think I will continue doing this job.

3 Comments:
ㄧ句句子太長啦
short while; both we were
我建議分詞不要用
直接斷句啦
I have got a good experience; I think I will continue doing this job.
I have got a good experience,and I think I will coutinue doing this ...
not very well was in the hospital hall,
*not very well可以改成跛腳的之類的
用adv.
there are a lot of people
*there were
the sense of satisfied
怎麼令人感到變態變態的-.-??
寫多一點吧...
"there are a lot of people around her"should be "there were ..."
"she wore a smile with appreciation and said “thank you” to me"should be "...Thank you...."
"and also talk with her for a short while" should be "talked with..."
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