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Sunday, October 07, 2007

A Day I'll Never Forget.-Draft One

This was a day that I would never forget. When I was 15 years old. It was a usual day. When my mother finished her work, she came home with a big cake. As soon as I saw that, I asked her why she brought back the cake, and then she replied, “It was for your birthday.” Suddenly, I was startled at her doings. I didn’t remember my birthday, but my mother did, and she also bought me the cake. After a short while, my uncle came to my house, when I opened the door, there was also cake on his hand, and he said “Happy birthday” to me. I was startled again. I felt very surprised. I still couldn’t imagine that it had ever come up to me. This day will keep in my heart all the time.

2 Comments:

Blogger Sally Sun said...

This was a
It was a ..
she replied"It is for your birthday"

good!

6:50 PM  
Blogger Debie said...

"It was a usual day"should be"...an usual..."

2:53 AM  

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